An Exceprt

Over the weeks, I have been working on a little thing I like to call a novel. Right now, the thing is just a rough first draft. A very. Very. VERY. Rough first draft. As Mr. Schwabaur puts it, a "lousy-but-proud-of-it" first draft. You get it. But, despite was I said in the last post, I have decided to post a little excerpt from my novel. Here goes:
If the town was busy, the military base was more so. Most people from the village had gathered there, everybody training with the overseers and trainers breathing down their necks. Despite this, I was still dragged trough the back of camp. The grounds were very interesting in the early morning. Half-asleep soldiers trying so desperately to try in unison as their trainers overseers barked orders, fully alert soldiers trying to get their half-asleep friends to wake up, people sneaking in breakfast much against the rules of the camp, and other spectacles were going on. Besides the early-morning chaos, I was still being dragged through the camp. Soon we reached the back, which was a small gate guarded by one man.
“‘Allo sir and... madam?” He said, Meridath snickering.
“Yes, this is my friend. Let us through.” He replied.
“‘Fraid that’s not an order I can take.”
“And why not?”
“Because I ‘ave a direct order from my overseer not to let anybody out this way.”
“But why?”
“I ‘ave a direct order, Meridath! I can’t let a soul out!”
“That’s ridiculous though! Who told you that?”
“My overseer.”
“And who,” said Meridath, grinding his teeth, “is your overseer?”
“Why, it’s Merilinn! She’s the prime overseer, you know, and any order out from her mea-”
“I’m going to talk to her! I bet she did this on purpose, just to toy with us, just to make me angry! My gosh, when I find her....” He said, all the way back to the cabin, even more rushed this time.
When we reached the cabin, I collapsed on the floor.
“Merilinn!” Yelled Meridath
“Yes, what’s the problem?”
“You ordered the guard not to let anybody out!”
“Ah, yes, so I did.”
“Why did you tell him that!”
“I don’t want you going out that entrance anymore.”
“Why!”
“Well, the military base is for members of the Athapra Military, strictly. And considering you aren’t a member of the Arhapra Military, you have no right to be there. It’s just my way of making sure you don’t go back.”
“What! Couldn’t you have, I don’t know, told me?”
“Well yes, I guess I could, but what fun would that be?”
“Fun! I’ve already been set back 30 minutes!”
“And you’ve had a great time, haven’t you?”
“No! I haven’t!”
“You’re wasting more time.”
“I, erm. Fine! I’ll just go then!”
“Be sure you go out the right way!”
A slamming of doors, and groaning of voices, and a dragging of me commenced after Merilinn’s reminder.
“She could’ve just told me! Why did she do that? I’ve been set back 45 minutes by now! What so hard about it all! I mean, she could have just asked me to stop going through the base, and I would’ve! And I mean really...” This carried on until we went out of camp and back to the gate to the military camp. And when we did, Meridath pulled his finger to his lips, turning towards me and back to the gate. Sneaking close to the chain-link door, he backed away, began to run, and yelled as he jumped onto the door. The poor guard, he turned just in time to see a flying Meridath coming for him. He fell over, landing on his back and screaming. This attracted the attention of the entire camp, and Meridath hid on the side of the wall, pulling me along with him. We were both laughing, as the guard tried to explain to the furious overseers that there was a flying monster that just attacked him, while he was still scared out of his wits. Eventually the overseers left him, and he stood back to guard. Again, sneaking behind him, Meridath whispered, “Hello.”
With much fury, the guard turned back. “You!”
“Me!”
“Why’d you do that!”
“Why wouldn’t you let me through!”
“It was an order!”
“It was a joke!”
“I hate you!”
“Ah, you see now!”
“That wasn’t funny!”
“Oh, I beg to differ.”
“I looked insane!”
“You aren’t?”
“I could have had my ranks pulled down!”
“And you’d pick them back up, yeah?”
“I... I...”
“I’ll be on my way, if you don’t mind. Next time, let me through, yeah?”
“I... I...”
“Good day.”
And at this, Meridath trotted off into the forest behind him, feeling quite proud of himself.